The Earth is in an utmost situation.
Artic ice-field could disappear the summer of the 15 next years(cstruction). Besides, in Western Europe, it will occur(e) an upset climatic(cstr) because of Global Warming.
Fisrt, the rising sea level is already very important. Hopefully, weirs have stopped about 30 millimeters of water since the beginning of sixties. But, will they be strong enough for the next 10 years ?(+)
Artic ice-field could disappear the summer of the 15 next years(cstruction). Besides, in Western Europe, it will occur(e) an upset climatic(cstr) because of Global Warming.
Fisrt, the rising sea level is already very important. Hopefully, weirs have stopped about 30 millimeters of water since the beginning of sixties. But, will they be strong enough for the next 10 years ?(+)
The average rate of melting has more than doubled between 2004 and 2006. Glaciers continue to melt faster and faster since 1980, they've lost 11.5 meters of thickness. To focus(e) on the shelf of Wilkins, an enormous piece og ice, equivalent of about four times the acrease of Paris, began to collapse under the effect of global warming; has indicated the National Snow and Ice Data Center.(plus haut dans ta phrase) "Millions of people depend directly (ordre) or indirectly on these natural water reserves for :
-drinking water,
-farming,
-industry,
-production of electric energies," have told Achim Steiner, the general secretary of the United Nations.Unfortunately, Humankind aren't (isn't) the only one who suffer because of global warming.
"1500 babies seals borned these (over the) last weeks on the seacosts of the Baltic sea, threatened to freeze to death. As a matter of fact, because of the too fast(such a rapid) melt(ing) of ice, mothers can't bury their babies in an ice nest to protect them during their first weeks of life. This period is essential because it allows babies to constitute a grease layer which will cover them against (the) cold temperatures ", that's what declared the association WWF in a press release, published on Monday, 10th March.(ordre)
What(which) leads me to think that on these seacosts, it would be (is) possible that none of the babies seals borned (over ) the(se) last weeks will (would) survive.
To conclude, I would say (that) if we don't react, we will take our planet to her (the) ruin !
Purposes gathered by Mathilde Dupas 3C
C'est beaucoup mieux Mathilde, les mauvaises habitudes de l'anglais oral se sont atténuées et le style correspond mieux à ce que je demande..
Attention au verbe naître = be born (jamais -ed) !!
Quelques maladresses de contruction certains segments n'apparaissent pas au bon endroit dans la phrase, point à corriger également: l'ordre des mots ADJ + NOM !!
C'est un très bon travail dans l'ensemble avec des rechercehs très intéressantes.
CL 3,5/5; Struc id 4/5; voc 4/5; Originalité 4/5
15,5 /20
C'est beaucoup mieux Mathilde, les mauvaises habitudes de l'anglais oral se sont atténuées et le style correspond mieux à ce que je demande..
Attention au verbe naître = be born (jamais -ed) !!
Quelques maladresses de contruction certains segments n'apparaissent pas au bon endroit dans la phrase, point à corriger également: l'ordre des mots ADJ + NOM !!
C'est un très bon travail dans l'ensemble avec des rechercehs très intéressantes.
CL 3,5/5; Struc id 4/5; voc 4/5; Originalité 4/5
15,5 /20
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