The "trifling" thruth. Are you sure ?

The glaciers of Greenland dwindle from 80 until 230 billions of tons in a year. Why this upset ? Because of who ? Who's menacing ? Us or ... Earth.

Global warming is the cause of the melting of glaciers, the rising sea level, the disappearing of animals species ... But who(what) is the cause of global warming ?
According to (the) most (of) scientists, global warming is due (of) to human technologies which pollute with emission.The Ozone layer which protects the Earth from dangerous rays of the sun, contains so much smog that his (its) temprature r(a)ises gradually. That's why glaciers break down and melt causing floodings. But global warming has an impact on the date of agricultural harvestings too. For example, in Burgundy, the dates of wine harvest are often more early tha(t)n the last years.
Beside this a study published in 2005 shows that on the whole the intensity of cyclones had(has)augmented (instead of) whereas the number of cyclones had(has) decreased.

To conclude, Earth needs help and we must change our behavior so that the situation improves.

By Margot Arnaud

Attention aux comparatifs qui ne sont toujours pas maîtrisés c'est grave !!
tu n'as pas compris l'emploi ni la construction de instead of(toujours suivi d'un verbe!!!)
Attention au temps dans les dernières phrases..
Il manque une touche personnelle dans cet article mais le contenu explique bien le problème majeur.

CL 3,5/5; Structure id 3,5/5; voc 3,5/5; Originalité 2/5
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