appointement for european english class at Corneille secondary school

Good afternoon Miss Toffolon,
I can't tell you if I will be in european english class next year because I don't know.
In effect, there will be a comission which will decide who will be in this class, next friday.
But I want to tell you thank you because thanks to you I could think about questions concerning my daily life.
Sincere salutations.
Lucie Labalette

Barack obama vs Hilary clinton

The comfortable national advantage which had barack obama on hilary Clinton in running has the American presidence (struture) are (have) in practice vanished and two démoncrates are dévancés by the republican john mc cain, to a new opinion poll reuters / zogby.
Obama does not have more than three points (anymore) beforehand on Clinton (47%contre44 %), while he had it jusqu' has (until)14 in February apres (to) have(ing) gathered in ten successive wins, points out this opinion poll.
The senator of the Illinois was weakened these last weeks by Clinton, who called into question his capacity (has) to hold the role of commander-in - chief of armies, and and by deep reactions to purposes arsonists of its ancient pastor of known Chicago rle racism.
Mainteant rest has wait...

virginie dasilva 3c

Beaucoup trop d'expressions en français Virginie, aucun mot ne doit apparaître en français dans tes rédactions!!
De plus les constructions sont parfois cahotiques ... (traducteurs???)
Tu pouvais faire des phrases plus simples avec les mêmes idées, encore une fois simplifie toi la tâche lorsque tu écris en anglais!
CL 2/5; Struc id 4/5; voc 1/5; Originalité 2/5
9/20

The struggle between the two candidates of democrate party(Hillary Clinton and Barack Obama) isbeing more and more unremitting, because they wants affront john Mc Cain for the power.
Last Saturday H.Clinton attacked B.Obamabecause she thinks the methode about B.obama are not good, she said "the U.S.A need a new president for listening her".
Barack Obama responded "his methdode are realy normal". The next meeting may be unrmitting for the victories to affront John Mc Cain. In the republican party the struggle is less heavy than democrate party.

Why the battle is hard?
The battle between H.Clintonand B.Obama is hard because B.Obama refused to be his vice president to H.Clinton. B.Obama said "he make it to the end and he will imposed his methode for the U.S.A.

As a conclusion the battle for the democrate party's is not finished.
De bardies Guillaume 3c

Global Warming : An insult has our Earth

Why (the) DO Global Warming take place? Who are (is)responsable? What (are the) consequences?

The Earth is in (getting) warm(ing) beacuse of the Global Warming!

(The) Global Warming is provoqu(k)ed by Us. The big industry reject an enormous quantity of CO2 every year. This gaz in effect greenhouse (is on the base of) causes the (elevation) rise in (of the) temperatures.

This elevation (rise) have (has) consequence terrible (ordre) on (the) nature : the ice field are breaking down, the sea level are (is) rising, species are endangering(ed). If the sea level increases, we so invade by the water.(=>water will invade the earth)

If the animals dead (verb = die), the Earth would not look like (any more in) Earth anymore but (look like) to an very enormous industry. (The) Global Warming changes climate(s) too, this change provoque cyclone ( Katrina ) who(which) ha(ve)s terrible repercussions(consequences) on the human.



For (to) stop(ped) (the) Global Warming, we can utilise (use) biotechnology, renouvable (renewable) energies and we have the duty of (to) forget the money and (to) know of(the) Earth.

Clément Garnier 3°C

Bon effort dans l'ensemble Clément, mais il y a encore trop de mots en français !!! Quel dommage!!
Tu dois veiller à l'ordre des mots dans la phrase (adj + nom) et aussi : jamais FOR + verbe !!!
Les idées sont bonnes et j'apprécie ton effort de n'avoir pas recopié des expressions toutes faites piochées dans les traducteurs.
Donc attention aux structure sde la phrase et continue!
CL 2,5/5 ; Struct id 4/5; voc 3/5 ; orig 3,5/5
13/20

collapse of the arctique

greenhouse effect augments while we do not react
what will happen(ed) if we do not act ?


the earth got warme(d)r (it self) about 0,6°C during these last 100 years. During this periode, the synthetic programs of greenhouse gas (about) augmented, to a great extent owing to the scald of fossil fuels and deforestation. During these last 20 years, the anxiety according to which these two phenomena would be, at last partly, linked mutually, augments.
that is to say, (the) global warming is now considered as being the result of the emplification(???) of greenhouse effect


if we do not act, the known glaciers and the imensity of floe will melt. there fore, several consequences are going to arrive (tsunami,etc.....)

NAME??????
Tu ne t'es pas vraiment approprié le sujet il manque un réel et profond questionnement! L'ensemble est trop descriptif en tous cas la mise en forme de l'article ne souligne pas suffisament le questionnement ou la problématique.
CL 4/5; structure id 3/5; voc 3/5, originalité 2/5
12/20

Who's in danger ? Us or our planet ...

The Earth is in an utmost situation.

Artic ice-field could disappear the summer of the 15 next years(cstruction). Besides, in Western Europe, it will occur(e) an upset climatic(cstr) because of Global Warming.
Fisrt, the rising sea level is already very important. Hopefully, weirs have stopped about 30 millimeters of water since the beginning of sixties. But, will they be strong enough for the next 10 years ?(+)

The average rate of melting has more than doubled between 2004 and 2006. Glaciers continue to melt faster and faster since 1980, they've lost 11.5 meters of thickness. To focus(e) on the shelf of Wilkins, an enormous piece og ice, equivalent of about four times the acrease of Paris, began to collapse under the effect of global warming; has indicated the National Snow and Ice Data Center.(plus haut dans ta phrase) "Millions of people depend directly (ordre) or indirectly on these natural water reserves for :

-drinking water,
-farming,
-industry,
-production of electric energies," have told Achim Steiner, the general secretary of the United Nations.Unfortunately, Humankind aren't (isn't) the only one who suffer because of global warming.

"1500 babies seals borned these (over the) last weeks on the seacosts of the Baltic sea, threatened to freeze to death. As a matter of fact, because of the too fast(such a rapid) melt(ing) of ice, mothers can't bury their babies in an ice nest to protect them during their first weeks of life. This period is essential because it allows babies to constitute a grease layer which will cover them against (the) cold temperatures ", that's what declared the association WWF in a press release, published on Monday, 10th March.(ordre)
What(which) leads me to think that on these seacosts, it would be (is) possible that none of the babies seals borned (over ) the(se) last weeks will (would) survive.

To conclude, I would say (that) if we don't react, we will take our planet to her (the) ruin !

Purposes gathered by Mathilde Dupas 3C

C'est beaucoup mieux Mathilde, les mauvaises habitudes de l'anglais oral se sont atténuées et le style correspond mieux à ce que je demande..
Attention au verbe naître = be born (jamais -ed) !!
Quelques maladresses de contruction certains segments n'apparaissent pas au bon endroit dans la phrase, point à corriger également: l'ordre des mots ADJ + NOM !!
C'est un très bon travail dans l'ensemble avec des rechercehs très intéressantes.
CL 3,5/5; Struc id 4/5; voc 4/5; Originalité 4/5
15,5 /20

The elections of the USA

After few weeks of victories in the country, Barack Obama has now more delegates than Hilary Clinton; John Mc Cain is the winner of the republican primary elections and he will be the republican representant for the elections of november 2008.


The participation electhas do very big, a lot of people want to vote on a many of etats, and a big diversity.


Pierre-Antoine RIZK

Ensemble beaucoup trop sommaire tu n'as pas suffisamment approfondi le sujet, donné de chiffres d'exemples etc...
CL 3/5; Structure id 2/5; voc 1/5; originalité 1/5
7/20